miércoles, 8 de junio de 2016

Carries war

Carrie's war.
2 hours after carrie and I had left our mother, we arrived in a station. We were so scared that we didn’t know who is going to meet us there. Our uncle came with our cousin. He said that we looked depressed. They greeted us if we were the most important people in the world. They made our life more joyful. He asked us if we wanted to visit our parents and we were very pleased; the 1st visit we did we found mother was dead, a Nazi, had seen her running so he had killed her. I think that the wars are only a cruelty. We stayed 3 days with my father, and when we were going back home our train was bombed...

2 comentarios:

  1. It is very interesting and i like the last part that says that their train was bombed and then the suspensives points because i like the stories that finish in suspense. If i have to suggest something i will suggest to add in the part of that their mother try to scaped i will add what did she do trying to scape.

  2. I think that it is a very good story because it has a little bit of action and a little bit of suspense. I suggest to add information of the uncle and the cousin and where were their parents. It's a very nice story.